S-So I was completely unable to write 4,000 words a day, but that’s not a surprise. That’s like 5 scenes everyday for VNs that mainly consist of dialogue. But it’s NaNoWriMo now, so I’ll at least attempt to write 50,000 words this month, too, just because I should.
For Magicians of Delphine, I think it’s important to mention that I’m changing the writing style. The writing so far has been mostly immediate and very dialogue heavy, but I’m going to slow down the writing just a little by breaking up the dialogue with a few sturdy lines of prose. Hopefully this will be okay.
Here’s a romantic scene for Tiberus. If anyone’s got any critique, I’m totally open to it. Is the pacing okay? Does the scene linger too long? Am I abusing descriptions? Did it give people dokis (or has the potential to give you dokis) or did you feel nothing?
I figure with that last strike, it’d be the end of his forehead flicking shenanigans, but to my surprise, the general leans in.
I see for a moment the lashes of his eyes nearly brushing against his cheek, the strong cut of his jaw, the coil of his ear. A faint scent fills my nostrils, something like cinnamon and cedar wood, as the general draws close, not to hold me, but to speak in my ear.
In the instance before his face finds its way to my side, I catch his eye and note with a strange exhilaration that he was leering.
Tiberus “Perhaps a harsher punishment is in order.”
His voice is gentle, almost a whisper. His warm breath tickles my ear, and my face grows hot. I can’t help but recoil, my hand jumping up to my ears, my heart throbbing in my chest.
That… That was a threat just now, wasn’t it? But if that’s the case, why didn’t it sound like a threat?
The low lull of his voice, the mysterious look in his eyes before he leaned in…
I don’t understand. I’m confused. I don’t understand anything: not myself, these feelings, the general… And for some peculiar, twisted reason, I am absolutely, unequivocally enjoying every moment of this strange torture.
On another note:
Panaderia: Ensaimada‘s script is about 90% done! I’m so close to finishing the first draft, I’m so excited. This game’s humor gets really weird sometimes and I’m worried the jokes’ll be lost on people, but eh… Hopefully people will still get a few laughs from it.
I’m not looking forward to working on the programming, though, haha.
I’ll post a few comics next time! 🙂 Look forward to it!